Essay 2 Peer Review Writer`s

Essay 2 PeerReview

Writer’s

Reviewer’s

Ahmed alharmoodi

Ahmed alqhtane

Ahmed alharmoodi

Works Well

What works well

Why it works well

Correct MLA formatting

The writer consistently uses surname and page numbers in the citations as well as correct MLA referencing in the bibliography.

Good idea transition

The paragraphs in the paper contribute to the development of the idea. A reader can connect the ideas in the paragraphs as each prepares one to the main idea in the first sentences.

Presentation of evidence

The two papers exhaust the evidence presented by the different authors. The writer goes to the extent of giving credibility of the referees who make substantive claims on the subject. Their c concept is therefore valid an appropriate for the paper.

Recommendations for Revision

What should be revised and why

How it might be revised (Be as specific as possible here)

The references in the Code Switching: Connecting with People through Speaking their Language, there lacks a consistency in the use of surname and first name.

There should be a consistent use of surname and the first name. For example, Ruiter, J.P and Hall, G., &amp Cook, G. (2012). These are in APA referencing instead of being in MLA referencing

There lacks a consistency in the citations at the beginning of the sentences and this does not reflect the correct MLA citation

For example, 1977 Carol Myers Scotton and William Ury. The writer should only use the surnames.

The writer does not include page numbers and surname.

The correct MLA format requires a surname and a page number on the header.

Ahmed alqhtane

Works Well

What works well

Why it works well

Good paragraph transition

The paragraphs in the two papers harmoniously contribute to the development of the idea. As one reads through the paper, the can connect the ideas in the paragraphs without having impromptu introduction of ideas.

Presentation of evidence

The paper exhausts the evidence presented by the different authors. The writer goes to the extent of giving credibility of the referees who make substantive claims on the subject. Their concept is therefore valid an appropriate for the paper.

Correct MLA formatting

The writer uses proper MLA paper format in the citation and also in the bibliography.

Recommendations for Revision

What should be revised and why

How it might be revised (Be as specific as possible here)

The MLA bibliography is not consistent since some of the sources are in APA

The writer should be consistent with the citations to reflect the MLA style. The last and the first should not be represented by initials.

Some of the paragraphs are too long such that some of the ideas overlap

The writer a can split them such that each represents a primary idea or support the idea in the preceding paragraph. For example, the second paragraph in Advancement in Technology: Helps or Harms student’s Communication has 255 words. They are far too many for a single paragraph.

There is scanty use of in text citation in Advancement in Technology: Helps or Harms student’s Communication and this may contribute to plagiarism

The writer should provide citation for all the paraphrased sentences. For example, in the same article, the second paragraph has only one citation for 255 words. The citations can be uniformly distributed